Forgotten Venice

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Hey Eric.

I really like this poem. I think it's ready to go out. I like the whole "spy-lover" feel to this in the second stanza with the word "evidence." I like the sadness. Beautifully and simply done Eric!

Lucy

Thank you Lucy

I wrote this about a year ago but it was not right.

Luckily I found the time to revise it this morning!

e

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Today I was in Memorial hospital for my brother's wife gave birth to their daughter, Elif. I took photos here and there. The only connection I can make is this and this is a great poem, which I'll keep reading... Thank you very much:)

Thanks Blue

and congratulations! The pics will always be a part

of your circle of reality now.

e

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I like this combination of photo and poem, but I'm not crazy about the somewhat generic title.

Thanks Renee

I had to set a place for the subject of the poem

(the work stems from a real life-experience),

perhaps I should have fleshed out the locality

some more. Its always a good idea

to set a specific scene in a poem and not

go for a generic scenario. It probably

only needs an extra line to do this.

Thoughts to ponder

e

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